Tension and climax aren't strong at the moment.
Think about poetry - pack as much content as possible into the fewest words.
Why do we care about the characters?
- We don't have multiple episodes in which to build up the characters.
Think about jokes in terms of the structure, and then the punchline
Starting in the middle of the action gives some context, can be used to establish relationship between characters.
If the animation can be modestly represented in a 3-panel comic, it could probably use more substance.
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